Soyala Amaya

Bubble! Long time no see my love! Yay! And, as always, decidedly delightful. I see nothing wrong with this...which is amazing...I always have something mean to say...yea, I've kind of ...

Wow...how long has it been since I've actually critiqued or posted something? Tis strange, I know. But I am back! Rar! Anyway, I like some of the imagery in this ...

Erm...it's not ENTIRELY a disaster...but NOT your best. Didn't bring across any real feeling other than boredom with society and disgust with everything. You have all these long lines, then ...

…Incan…you know, as cute as you are, if I ever saw you in real life, I might be morally obligated to run you over with my car…the nasty gray one, ...

Nice. very nice. Best one I've read so far today. But still, I must critique. The first two stanza's...just...wow. I adore the imagery and the sense of almost...euphoric despair. The ...

All right, not my favorite, but not the worst. First off, you start out with a simile, but then you change later on and just call yourself a leaf, istead ...

Erm...yea, you were right about the title. While an emotional topic, way to overdone, way to cliche, and very VERY hard to find a new way to portray it. I ...

Erm…right. Very, well, surreal. The title fits at least. To reiterate a few points, lose the numbers, and try to keep the idea throughout. You kind of lost me in ...

I kind of have to ask where it's going? WHat's the point? It feels like you started a joke and left it hanging right before the punch line. nice style, ...

*gasp* My first reply on here since Spain! Lordy I want to go back now... Ok, onto critique. You started really well, and caught my attention with the first couple ...

When I first saw the title, I was ready to bust in here and start yelling about 'sin' and how it's overused and just a...ergh, there I go again. I ...

All right, you started out ok, but then you just started rambling into inanities that seemed to have no connection to what you were trying to get across. The finely ...

Um...Deloclya? You do know that Incandesence was being, erm, sarcastic, right? Because frankly, this is one of the most over-done, cliche, hackneyed themes I've ever seen! We're all going to ...

In response to the hopeless plug left in my message box, yes, I do critique stories, I just haven't been doing it on this site because I'm having so much ...

Much much better. And yes, sober, un-high writing is usually better than whhen one is drunk and rocketing to the moon in their underpants. I'm a little lost in the ...